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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagre

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The pie graphs highlights data on the
first
 place Nigerians and Germans use so as to access the news in a normal week. Overall Germans fundamentally obtain their news from newspaper, albeit the most Nigerians find information from TV.
Furthermore
, other sources and friends and family account for the lowest percentage. Looking at the details, the proportion of TV is responsible for 30
%
of the total in Germany;
however
, it stands just above six-tenths in Nigeria.
By contrast
, newspaper is the most informative sources in Germany, contributing to 45%, which is nearly three times as much as that of Nigerians.
In addition
, the share of the radio account for a tenth in Germany,
conversely it
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conversely, it
 stands just above a fifth in Nigeria. Adding more data, Germany witness that the contribution of Internet accounted for 11%, whereas it ranks the
last
 in Nigeria, at 1%.
In contrast
, other sources stand the lowest proportion in Germany, at 4%, whilst friends and family rank the lowest percentage in Nigeria.

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