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Some people believe that there will be a reduction in air travel in the future. Do you think that this trend is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, while flying makes
travel
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 to
faraway
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far away
 destinations facile, some individuals claim that the usage of
airplanes
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 is likely to experience the diminution of demand in the upcoming days. In my view, there are some indications that
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air
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the air travel industry
travel
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 industry has brought various benefits rather than its inconveniences.
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, there are a number of reasons behind
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 point of view that will discuss in
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 essay. On the one hand, it is obvious flying shortens the
travel
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 time to the destination. Solely because a plane travels much faster than a car or train.
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,
air
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travel
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 allows passengers to relax more than driving,
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 they don't have to be constant alertness to avoid an accident.
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, reduction in
air
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travel
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 leads to increasing the intensity of road terrific jams and road accidents.
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, according to annually traffic
police’s
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police
 report after Nouruz holidays the high percent of road
accidents’
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accident
 fatality happen for the purpose of having a faraway look regarding driving fatigue. As follows,
air
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traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 makes it possible that people can go anywhere easily and enjoy in-flight entertainments and services. Thereby reducing flights in the future, might effects on
tourism industry
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the tourism industry
 in the world which could be worse drawback of
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 trend for
countries’ economy
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the countries’ economy
a countries’ economy
 and international businesses.
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, In the past several years
increased use
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the increased use
 of fossil fuels has caused a serious threat to our environment.
Airplanes
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 use tones of fuels daily and release
large amount
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large amounts
a large amount
 of carbon dioxide into
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air which
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the air, which
the air which
 has
negative impact
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a negative impact
 on
planet
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the planet
.
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,
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 dangerous gas has a huge portion in global warming.
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As
 an illustration, beyond
number
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the number
 of flights
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 every day in all round the world that
give
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gives
 rise to
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 pollution in terms of noise and emission of gases. Regard to
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fact as
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fact, as
 some notable drawbacks, it is the positive aspect of
air
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traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 reduction. To conclude,
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 some believe flying is going to decrease one day, I think
air
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traveling’s
change location; move, travel, or proceed, also metaphorically
travels
travel’s
travelling
 profits are more than its detriment for people.
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, it is better to use it considerably for the right purpose.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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