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Some people think planning future is a waste of time and people should focus on the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Planning for
future
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the future
 is something that intrigued and reliable
to
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for
 our life. Being concerned
to
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with
until
 something that could happen and prepare what path that we should take in the future is important. But some of us
tought
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thought
taught
 that those things unnecessary for some reason so
this
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 essay would
disscuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discussed
discourse
 about it. Planning future could be implemented in a lot of cases and terms. As an example, high school student
choose
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chooses
 what university that would help them catch on their dream. Plan to get to the university is not only by choosing the university, but the applicants should know what requirement they have to prepare. By knowing the
requirement it
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requirement, it
 would push them to get a bigger effort because they already know the problem that they are gonna facing.
Moreover
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, they could improve their skills and make a
portofolio
a large, flat, thin case for carrying loose papers or drawings or maps; usually leather
portfolio
 that suitable for
they
of them or themselves
their
 dreams. Planning something
make
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makes
 people steps more structured so they would know what things should be altered. In another way,
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 much focus on planning something can make you forget in improving your skills to be the quality that you want to be. So
that is
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 the reason why most of the people think that planning something is not
important especially
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important, especially
 when your plan
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 work as it should be, some of us might lose track and fail. We could see that a lot of
person
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people
persons
 in
this
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 world that couldn't survive when their plan
doesnt
does not
doesn't
 work. Here is the point, when people focus on the
present they
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present, they
 must have
prepare
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prepared
 about all of the worst case and more likely flexible rather than the
first
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 condition. Each of the
option
Suggestion
options
 has their own positive and negative. For a bigger gain it should be combined. People should have setting their dream and set some step to catch
it but
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it, but
it
it is
it's
also
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 important to prepare for every condition (like another plan) because we
wont
will not
won't
 know
what
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what's
 going to be
happen
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happening
.
Therefore
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, people should set and improve their ability because setting dreams is not enough. To be a successful person we should have some dreams and capability to compete in
this
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 global
area
a period marked by distinctive character or reckoned from a fixed point or event
era
.

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