Some people believe that entertainers are paid too much and their impact on society is negative, while others disagree and believe that they deserve the money they make because of their positive effect on others. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Entertainment is one of the most followed profession in the world. It is
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pertinent to ask is the
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made by the entertainers justified considering their positive or negative
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on the
society
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? It is important to know that not all entertainers are high earners. Even in case of high earners, their earnings mostly depend upon their capital earning ability for respective businesses and their personal
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following. In
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essay, the factors determining the earnings of the entertainers and their income’s justification vis a vis the
entertainer
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’s
impact
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on the
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is discussed. The entertainers are a diverse group of people.
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, entertainers can be circus artists, sports players, television artists or movie stars. There is a huge variation in the salaries of all these professions. Even in one single
profession like
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profession, like
movie actors, there are very few actors who make it to the top and have very high income.
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, we find that there are all
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sorts
of entertainers and like any other profession, there is a discrepancy between the income of entertainers.
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Therefore, assuming
that all
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’s are high earner’s is an incorrect assumption. The there are two major reasons that
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determine
the earnings of entertainers. The
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reason is their ability to make
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for the businesses they work for. One can look at the example of Movie actors, movie actors who give consecutive hit films are usually the most paid ones.
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is because the producers are very much assured of good returns on these actors and they are not hesitant to spend
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on these entertainers. The
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reason that determine an
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’s earnings is their
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following. An
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who has
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a huge fan
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following is a brand in itself. It is
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brand value that determines the earnings of entertainers. The reason of the
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following is usually the excellence of the
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in his or her field. The fact that an
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is a good or bad role model for the
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positive or negative
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is the bi-product of the
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following. In general, the earnings of an
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are
independent of their
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on the
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. In conclusion, it can be said that entertainers do not singularly fall in the bracket of high or low earners.
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, their earnings depend mostly on their ability to make
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for their businesses and their personal
fan
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following.
Entertainer
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’s
impact
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on the
society
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does not have any substantial
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on his or her income.
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, it is wrong to assume that there is a relation between an
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’s
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on the
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and his or her earnings.
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means that the question of how much the entertainers are paid
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their positive or negative
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on
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does not even arise.

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