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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantages?

#media #interaction #people #society
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Over the
last
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 few years, numerous changes have been witnessed in the field of
communication
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. Nowadays, many people
replace
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are replacing
 personal
interaction
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 with speaking via social networks. While it is considered by some that the main drawback of
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 trend is less emotional
interaction
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, I believe the most principal benefit of online
communication
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,
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 as its high level of convenience, overrides the above-mentioned weak point. The most common disadvantage of
interaction
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 through social media is the emotional deficiency. In fact, users are not able to express the whole spectrum of their feelings through texts or a limited number of
emoji
an iconic mental representation
image
images
 pictures. Even voice messages and video calls do not create the effect of
real presence
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the real presence
 of a person. To exemplify, more than 60% of Facebook users have noted the lack of emotional connection in conversations
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at
 the weakest point of online
communication
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.
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, if people continue
conversating
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 on social networks, the strength of a sensitive and emotional connection between individuals will reduce dramatically. The main advantage of
interaction
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 through the Internet, in my view, is its convenience.
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 means that users might chat whenever they have a possibility to do
this
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. When there is a shortage of time or a person is exhausted, they are not obliged to communicate with others as they could simply ignore a message or an online call.
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, online
interaction
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 is convenient owing to the technical opportunity to speak to people who are located far away. Undoubtedly, there is no need to travel to another
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place to have a conversation
 with a friend or relative due to the fact that online messengers allow to send a text in
matter
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a matter
 of seconds.
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, I am convinced that the convenience of social media overcomes the problem of a lowered emotional link between individuals. To summarise, it is evident from the foregoing arguments that the strong points of online
communication
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,
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 as
flexible responding
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flexible, responding
 and remote interacting, prevail over the main objection, namely the emotional deficiency.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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