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The diagram below show how glass containers, such as bottles, are produced and recycled.

#show #glass #containers #bottles
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The diagram describes a process of how to manufacture and recycle the
glass
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 containers.
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the
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glass
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 production has 4 steps to make raw materials into the product, which is the
glass
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 container.
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 the other,
glass
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 recycling,
need
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 5 steps to convert used
glass
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 into new products. At
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glass
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 production, the process starts with 3 main raw materials: sand, soda ash, and limestone. These materials will be mixed
together with
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 some chemicals to become a perfect mixture.
This
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 mixture will be melted in a
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 furnace at approximately 1500•c. The next one is
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 step, when molten
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 is blown into a permanent shape. Let the model cool down and the
glass
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 container is completed.
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,
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 recycling starts the process with the used
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. These items were collected and sorted by
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. The sorted
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 was washed carefully in order to remove impurities like dust or dirt. After that, non-impurities
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 is crushed and melted.
The next step is
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 quite similar to the shaping step in
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glass
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 production
,
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 when molten
glass
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 is blown and
molded
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 into
new
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a new
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 product.

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