Some people think nowadays children have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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. Because of they have to study in the school too much. Examples in my country they need to learn in school around 4 hours in the morning and around 3 in the afternoon. So with these learning

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they don't have enough times to relax or attend to outdoor activities. They just focus 4 hour they own to learn on the terrible table in school. I think they don't need to learn too much like

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of learning in a room which got 4 walls. Let's bring them to outside and teaching for them about real animals, how to better talk, behave each other. Especially, learning soft skill is very important. As survival skill, skills when they got a dangerous situation. Conclusively, we have to give them more times than now in older to they can find and discover what they like and passion

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people think nowadays children have too much freedom. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The picture illustrates the data about the amount of guests who traveled 4 various genres of travel industries between 1981 and 1999 in the UK.

In some countries, companies allow people to work from home. In others, people are still expected to work in an office. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.