Some people believe children should get homework everyday, while others think they should not. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

The teachers divide into two campuses
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the homework. Some of them, opponents,
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the daily task gives them
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feedback about the pupil’s comprehension, others, proponents, claim that it will be overloaded with the
students
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, the opponent says that daily school duties
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not only
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helping
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to understand the subject
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but
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assisting
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the teacher
to get
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feedback from his
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In other words
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, if the
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answer the task, it means they completely understand the lesson.
Thus
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, the teachers needlessly repeat
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lesson for his class.
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, if they have a lot of mistakes, it means the teacher should repeat
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the lesson for his
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However
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, the
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may face some
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with their
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helping them to search in the library or internet. Thereby, That will improve their cognitive thinking
collaboration
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and collaboration
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skills.
On the other hand
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, the proponents claim that the
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is not beneficial for several reasons.
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,
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exercise
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is compulsory conflicting with the human being because the human being tends to
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.
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, if
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felt the compulsory task, they would try to finish it rather than understand it.
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, daily
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has adversely affected
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the
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, it needlessly says that a huge of school duties will constrain the
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' movements,
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that
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makes them feel some pressure.
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type of pressure may exaggerate
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mental health issues;
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as
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anxiety. In conclusion, people still wonder whether the
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is
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good for
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scholar
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or not. The supportive side pretends that
pupil’s
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exercise
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will give feedback from
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about their comprehension,
while
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another side
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that
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type of daily
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may lead
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scholar
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to
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mental health issues. It seems to my thinking way that both sides have a logical reason behind their opinions, but the disadvantages of
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school

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language
Work on sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. For instance, phrases like 'the teachers divide into two campuses toward the homework' can be rephrased for better understanding.
task achievement
Make sure to fully develop your arguments with more supporting examples, especially to strengthen the points you are making about each side's opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the overall coherence of your essay by using clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
You've presented both sides of the argument, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic and provides a balanced view.
coherence and cohesion
The overall structure of the essay, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, shows a good understanding of essay format.

Your opinion

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