Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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There is no doubt that in recent years road

safety

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is becoming an increasing concern

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alongside

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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"

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subsequent rise in traffic offences. I agree with the majority that

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offenders should be faced with strict penalties.

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and foremost, it is necessary to find alternative measures to punish minor offences

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like speeding, jaywalking and other violations. Studies have shown that a penalty by itself will not be adequate to deter

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circumstances from

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occurring in the future.

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of merely charging a fine, a court-ordered period of volunteering work will not only lead to their reformation, but would

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be useful for the betterment of society.

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, if

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offences were only met with a small punishment

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then

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people would not fear the consequences, and

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, would not be adequately motivated to improve road

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, major offences should have

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legislated

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strictly enforced in order to safeguard the streets. I believe that offences

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as driving under the influence, and

hit-and-run should

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hit-and-run, should

be made non-bailable and these criminals should face

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period of jail time. Less serious cases like rash driving should be threatened with suspension of license or even revoked depending on the type and number of misdemeanours.

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, fewer people will be prone to accidents

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thereby, improving the

safety

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of both the commuters and the pedestrians. To conclude, I believe that’s traffic violations should not only be met with fines, but

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with stricter punishments

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such

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as license suspension and jail terms to prevent a threat to the

safety

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of citizens.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

260 words

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Most people believe that stricter punishment should be given for traffic offences. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Include an introduction and conclusion

You recently attented a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home you found you had left some vital papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager or the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are vital . - Suggest a solution.

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