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Many parents encourage young people to leave home early when they become older,while others think they should stay at home with the family.discuss both views and give your opinions

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Family plays an important role in everyone's life. Few people leave
home
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 after a certain age. Many parents encourage to do so.
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 makes individuals grow strong psychologically. It is really important for anyone
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facing
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 society, it will be hard on them sometimes. To withstand those hard times
one
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 should know how to
face
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 them, it comes from the experience. If you live with your family, they
face
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 the problem before you are facing it. In fact, even if staying far from
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home, still you
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home, you still
 will get support from the family but you
face
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 the problem. Another important thing is money management.
One
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 should know about financial management. It is very important for anyone to have financial freedom. Many parents encourage their children to leave
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 or to live individually is because of
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 reason. They will learn how to earn money and get financial freedom.
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, there are, some pitfalls that can easily overwhelm the potential benefits of leaving the
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. Primary
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 is relations. Sometimes staying away from the family may create a space between the relations. Some argue that distance makes relation stronger, but from many reports it is clear that distance impacts relation in a bad way. Due to work load sometimes it really very hard to spend time with family.
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 will be even worse when you are living far. You can't involve in your family discussions and decisions.
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 may impact the emotional status of an individual, it indirectly effects society. In my opinion,
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 should have a private life for a certain time.
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 gives you a lot experience and strength to you. The family will be always there for you to support, again, you should be there when your family needs you.
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 need strength which comes from facing issues in life. To conclude,
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 should spend a certain part of time away from
home
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.
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