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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their home rather than buying what are the advantages of renting a home?

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In
modern era
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the modern era
,
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,
 due to the rising level of
housing rates plethora
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the housing rates plethora
 of masses are choosing
rent
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renting
 option
rahther
on the contrary
rather
 than buying
own
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own house, especially
own house especially
an own house especally
an own house an own house especally
house
 especally in metro cities
,
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,
there are
myraid
too numerous to be counted
myriad
 of origins behind
this
 problem as well as I will elaborate positive and negative views in upcoming fragments with rational conclusion. Ironically
enough in
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enough, in
present era
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the present era
, it is very difficult to buy self
house
 owing to the cost of houses are very expensive, most of people cannot
efford
be able to spare or give up
afford
 it,
as a result
 they prefer tariff home
.
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.
 Moving
further
,
multiple
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multiplicity
 of individuals live
at
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in
apartment complex
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an apartment complex
the apartment complex
apartment complexes
, because they are doing
job
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jobs
,
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,
education away from their
house
, it means that to complete their fundamental
necessties
the condition of being essential or indispensable
necessities
 they live at
boarding
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the boarding house
a boarding house
house
.
Hence
, masses prefer
accommodation
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an accommodation, house
an accommodation house
house
 because they want
save
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to save
 their money.
However
,
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,
buying a new home has its own merits
,
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,
nowadays own property play
paramount role
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a paramount role
 in everyone's
life
,
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,
with the help of their own
house
 people can secure their
life
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lives
,
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,
addtionally
in addition, by way of addition; furthermore
additionally
, they can live their
life
 without any worries along with they can increase their wealth eventually. Apart from it, folks have no anxiety regarding
lugguage
cases used to carry belongings when traveling
luggage
language
 transfer
,
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,
in
addttion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
,
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,
peole
an excavation that is (usually) filled with water
pool
people
 can
life
 their whole
life regardless
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life, regardless
 any change or relocate to new rental properties.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 can be inferred that,
although
 merits are
overcome
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overcoming
 the
demerits but
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demerits, but
 numerous
individiuals
a human being
individuals
individual
 prefer rental home due to the costly
house
.
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