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Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that school children should study in a single
sex
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institutionsex
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 institution, whereas others opine that integrated schools are more beneficial for overall growth of students.
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, in my opinion, both have their pros and cons. In
this
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 essay, I will examine both opinion and will provide logical conclusion. On one hand, it is better for students in single
sex
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 college as they have less distractions and they can focus on
there
of them or themselves
their
 academic
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
 more effectively.
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, due to no interaction of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
sex
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, mind is stable and
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 the energy can fully be utilized in studies.
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, in India today, it was found that students score better in single
sex
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 colleges.
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, there are no relationship issues, no emotional imbalance and they come out to be more real as there is no show off fashion.
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, co-aid schools provide
variety
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a variety
 of personality traits in children which helps them in future. They know how to work with
other gender
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the other gender
 and it helps them to socialize with people quite easily, while students studied in all boys/girls college are more likely to have anxiety when they work with
other gender
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the other gender
,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 for boys.
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, in a study, it was found that about 68% of boys who graduated from all boys college become anxious when they work with female colleagues.
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, it helps build communication skills and create a sense of togetherness with
other gender
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the other gender
. In conclusion, integrating the sexes can prevent social awkwardness later in life and make pupils more sociable in the company of other genders, but a school’s primary purpose is to educate and those with just one
sex
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 or the other outperform those that allow both.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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