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People aim to achieve the balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problem? How to overcome it?

Dear sir or madam, I'
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 writing
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 letter to request you to change my start day in your
company
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 because of my previous commitment in
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the present working company
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. I received your offer letter today. I'
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 very happy after looking at it and excited to start working in your
company
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, but there is an issue with the
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more desirable than another
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 start date in the letter which is
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 Monday. I'
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 afraid that I can't make it because of previous commitments with my present
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. I have been working with
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company
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last three years
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the last three years
 eleven months. I was signed with
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company
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 for
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a four year contract
four year contract
 which is going to be
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the end
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of
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 month, so I'
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 requesting you to change the start date to
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 month. Please understand the situation and consider the request. I'
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 looking forward to hear back from you as soon as possible. Regards, Dheeraj.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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