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It is suggested that young people should undertake a period of unpaid work to help people in the community. Does it bring more benefits of drawbacks to the community and young people?

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Community
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 services have always been an integral part of a society’s development. It is seen both as a way to contributing to the society as well as to the individuals volunteering for it. The merits of working towards the benefit of the
community
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 definitely outweigh the drawbacks. There are numerous benefits of
community
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 service by young people.
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, in
this
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 world of virtual socializing, services within the
community
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give
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gives
 young adults opportunities to be more physically active as well as interactive. They get to experience life outside their comfort zone and learn the benefits of working together.
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, benefits to the
community
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 include keeping the city clean and maintaining hygiene. These volunteers get to assist in old age homes and provide assistance to the residents there. The only disadvantage is unpaid employment, which will reduce
he
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his
 interest among individuals to participate. The prospect of minimal payment can be considered,
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 more young people can take interest.
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