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In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

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Shopping plays a vital role as it becomes a chore for every individual.
Although
, it is debatable whether it will be treated as a positive development. For today's generation, going to buy stuff in the market becomes much easier than the earlier times.
For instance
, if a person needs a trouser, he/she has hundreds of varieties to get it and that too from multiple shops.
On the other hand
, earlier generation had to struggle to get a particular taste due to lesser options available in the market.
Furthermore
, with the innovation in technology sector, it becomes a handy for the people to buy the stuff using credit cards anytime whereas it was hard for an individual to buy stuff right away due to lack of funds and with no credit options available.
This
also
 puts a negative impact on the mind a human being as it increases the spending power by getting influence of the advertising.
Moreover
, it has been noticed that families are usually going for shopping or outing once a week,
this
 increases a valuable time between them. But
on the other hand
, it’s a fact that just for one day outing, parents are working from sun to the moon in full week to earn well, which puts a negative impression. In contrary, older ones invest equal time in both with their loved ones and towards their work. In the nutshell, I would recommend earned well spend well theory should be adopted by each and every one of us, so that it will keep the economy running in a positive trend.

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