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Some people think that electrocars are important for us, while others think that they are expensive. Discuss both sides of view amd give your own opinion

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As time elapses, electro cars are becoming more and more essential in our life. It is often argued that
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 is a positive development for
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environment
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the environment
, whilst others disagree and think they are too expensive.
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 essay agrees that an increase in the electronics industry is beneficial to
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environment
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the environment
.
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 essay will discuss both points of view. It is clear that electrics are extremely important for our world as they are environmentally friendly. No sooner had traditional vehicles been developed, than air quality became considerably worse because of emissions produced by them. It is
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 agreed that electrics are one of the best options to reduce the amount of
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this emissions
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these emissions
. The tesla is a prime example, which don't produce harmful emissions and don't damage to
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environment
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the environment
.
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, many disagree and feel that buying electrons is not available for middle class people. Electrics are considered to be one of the most expensive cars in the world. Despite
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, it is expected reduction of prices as time elapses, as electrical industry develops considerably.
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, since 2010, the price of
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 cars has been decreased by 63% and 24%, and it is predicted that the price will decrease by 20% in the
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 5 years. In conclusion, while the benefits of electrons give rise to protect
environment
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, some still feel that people should earn a lot of money to buy it.
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, as long as Eletro cars cost decrease, people can buy them as time elapses.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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