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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples.

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It is true that damage to the environment in some parts of the world has been getting worse in recent years,
although
 many countries trying to address
this
 challenge. There are a variety of possible reasons for
this
, but steps can definitely be taken to tackle the problem. In my opinion, three main factors are to blame for the
pollutance
undesirable state of the natural environment being contaminated with harmful substances as a consequence of human activities
pollution
 of
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.
Firstly
,
major part
Suggestion
a major part
the major part
 of people tend to use automobiles in an uncontrolled way and the air is polluted by emissions that produced by cars.
Secondly
, if we cannot stop using enormous amount of the plastic in our daily lives, which is considered one of the main pollutant of the
soil
, there must be an issue depending on
soil
 erosion.
Finally
, utilizing
water
 a lot and wasting it might create drought as well as
water
 pollution.
Enviromental
Suggestion
Environmental
 issues can certainly be resolved. I believe that the change must start with us
,
Accept space
,
 who need to reduce the utilization of private cars and use public transports
instead
. It will definitely help to
elliminate
terminate, end, or take out
eliminate
illuminate
 acid rains
,
Accept space
,
 greenhouse gases and reduce the burning of fossil fuels.
Also
, plastic products could play an important role in damaging the environment, so using paper and cloth bags
instead
 of plastic would be
eco
Suggestion
Eco
 friendly and assists to save our valuable
soil
. At the same time, economizing
water
 will prevent any other ecological issue and would help to overcome difficulties depending on
water
. In conclusion, countries will continue to face discipline problems
unless, we
Suggestion
, unless we
 learn how to save
water
,
soil
 and atmosphere cleanly.
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