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It has been argued that giving gifts to friends and family should not be encouraged, because money is often wasted on things that people do not like or want. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this?

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For ages, people have been presenting gifts as a gesture of love, good will and affection towards their loved ones.
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, in modern times, many would argue that
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 practices lead to wastage of money as the gifts presented, to the close relatives, often tend to be less useful to them. In my opinion,
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 is true and strongly agree that items should not be gifted to anyone, despite of its symbolic meaning. Traditionally, presenting gifts and other valuable items has been considered as a way of expressing ones loves and affection towards the recipient, while some even gifting to show their appreciation for the person's hard work.
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, parents often
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 their children with some sort of toys during their birthdays to express love, while the teacher would present something as a token of appreciation to its students for their hard work. Despite of its symbolic standing, many avoid gifting items to friends and family. In modern times, where everyone is familiar with online shopping, many purchase things which they feel are essential for them.
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 makes selecting something to be presented as a
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, difficult, as the presenter is unaware of the recipient's needs; leading to wastage of money. Due to
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, in many of the weddings that I was invited, the host specifically mentions, not to bring gifts, in the invitation itself. In conclusion, in spite of the value that it holds and the message it conveys while presenting, a loved one, with a
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 is outweighed by the difficulty in choosing the right item.
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Hence, in
 my opinion, I strongly agree that people should not be encouraged to give gifts to close ones as the
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 may be rendered useless to the recipient and ultimately lead to wastage of money.
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