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These days, mobile phones and the internet are very important to the ways in which people relate to one another socially. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The invention of communication mediums,
such
 as cell phones and the
internet
, has been profound achievements in today's
world
.
This
 essay will outline the perspective, merits the big one is
narrowed
Suggestion
narrowing
 down the distances, and another one is entertainment through video games, which is stronger than its demerits.
To begin
 with a positive perspective, friends and relatives, living a million miles far are one call away. Mobile phones are the fastest and reliable source to contact loved ones through audio or video calls.
Moreover
, the phone is a blessing to quickly access,
help services
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help, services
such
 as police, ambulance and firefighters in case of emergencies. Another exclusive feature is its camera, to capture valuable moments of life, anytime and anywhere. A recent survey conducted by the University of Virginia reported, 78% of the people in the
world
 prefer the mobile phone to stay connected and to socialize with their nears and dears. Apart from
this
, the
internet
 made the
world
 a smaller place, from where people can play online video games individually or can make teams where members could belong to different countries while sitting in their comfort zones.
Furthermore
, another benefit is, any childhood lost friend can be found and stay connected using applications, Facebook, Instagram and many more. In January 2020, around 2.6 billion users in the whole
world
are connected
Suggestion
connect
 through only Facebook. Moving
further
, the merits mentioned above should not blind us towards the danger the
internet
 possesses as it is the double-edged weapon. There is always a risk of a hacker to intrude on someone's privacy and identity theft.
In addition
 to
this
, overuse of phones and the
internet
 can cause health risks,
for example
, poor eyesight, depression and anxiety. In conclusion, undoubtedly, the advantages of the newer ways of correspondence remove the distances
among
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between
 many people.
However
, everyone should be vigilant towards its disadvantages.
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