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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
Nowadays, online shopping is more and more popular. Many people think online shopping will eventually take the place of
offline
 stores, and all stores would be closed. It is radical, and I don'
t
 think
this
 will happen. In
this
 essay, I will show you why. It is true that online shopping has a prevalent influence in our life. It's convenient. We can buy almost everything at home - consumer goods, electronic products, or even furniture, and with the modern delivery system, we can receive them really quick. Except the demands from customs, the producer is
also
 willing to sell their product online. Electronic commerce can reduce the cost
on
Suggestion
to
for
 rent and
distribution
Suggestion
distribute
. It helps the manufacture to make more profits. In spite of the prevalence of online stores, the
offline
 stores will never disappear. There are still many circumstances that people can'
t
 leave
offline
 stores. Sometimes, the online pictures couldn'
t
 tell us the real experience. We have to try it in real stores. Sometimes, we want to go shopping with our friends.
Online store
Suggestion
The online store
An online store
 may not a convenient for us to communicate. Sometimes, we need to buy something for emergency, while the online shopping couldn'
t
delivery
Suggestion
deliver
 to us in time. There are
also
 many disabled people who couldn'
t
 buy
thing online
Suggestion
the thing online
 by themselves. The staffer in
offline
 store may help them.
Farther
Suggestion
Further
 more, the manufacture wants to keep its
offline
 stores as well.
Offline
 stores are not a place to sell products. They are
also
advertisement
Suggestion
advertised
 for their brand. It gives people underlying impressions of the product. If I saw a brand in a shopping mall in the city
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
, I would think it is creditable and in good quality. In conclusion, the online shopping will be more and more popular, many
offline
 stores may face to be closed, but they will never disappear. We still need them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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