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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some humans believe that being satisfied with the
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 you have is more crucial that
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security
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 others agree that career fulfilment cannot constantly be expected and having an enduring
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 is more meaningful. On one hand, possessing
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 satisfaction is paramount in order to ensure mental health, as well as, to succeed by doing something with enthusiasm.
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, if time goes by quickly, you are able to feel useful to society by doing something that pleasures and allows you to pay your bills you will keep your mind sane.
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, worrying about profession preservation
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 gives you the extra motivation to elevate your standards not to lose the
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 you love.
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,
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 is a key factor if someone or something is depending on you and you are in the urgent need for economic stability in your life.
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, in case of having a family to support or having rent contracts on a house, people in these situations can not afford to lose their jobs,
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, must priority
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security
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. In my opinion, having both
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 satisfaction and
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 as well is the ideal situation and I believe it is possible to achieve
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 connection. It is extremely necessary to find the perfect satisfying
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 and making the effort not to lose focus in order to get
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security
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, disliking the
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 you go to on a daily basis can lead to a mental break down really hard to recover from.
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