Some say that by showing sporting events such as Olympic and world cup in television will encourage old people to do exercise.

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Physical
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is vital in keeping our body healthy.
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, over the past years it was observed that adults are not doing enough
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. While some say that the best way to inspire them to
exercise
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is by showing spectacular sporting events like the Olympic and world cup on
television
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, I believe that there are better ways to encourage them
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as improving
exercise
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facilities and
support
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from family members. There are people who believe that showing spectacular sporting events in the
television
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,
such
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as the Olympics and world cup will encourage older people to
exercise
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. The basis of their argument lies in the fact that adults have the inherent tendency to follow their role models or idols. Sports celebrities
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as boxers, tennis players, basketball stars have a great influence on their fans, and by showing them sports events on TV they follow the ways of sports stars.
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, adults will engage in physical activities
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as
exercise
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.
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, in the Philippines, every time Manny Pacquiao has a boxing match, a month after his fight the attendance in boxing gym increases by 30 percent.
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, showing sports events on
television
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does not guarantee a perpetual engagement in
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among adults. I believe that by improving
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facilities like gyms and sports centre and family
support
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could encourage them. When
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facilities are in good condition they will be eager to try and they will not be afraid of accident that may cause by poor condition of
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equipment.
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, family members have huge influence among adults. By being with them during their
exercise
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, they will be driven by the moral
support
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and
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they will continue and even increase their activity.
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, my father increased his jogging activity from once a week to twice a week since I joined him in his morning jogging routine. In conclusion,
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showing spectacular sport events on
television
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could inspire older people to
exercise
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, I believe that by improving the
exercise
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facilities and sports centre together with the family
support
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, adults will engage more in
exercise
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.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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