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Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However others believe that they can get news better through other media platforms. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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It is argued, that some people prefer other media platforms for getting news, than newspapers.
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, in my opinion newspapers are more reliable, with more experience. On the one hand, our civilizations have been developing into an advanced and sophisticated form in recent decades.
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 of that, the nature of informing people and spreading news
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has been changed
 specially thanks to widespread use of the
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.
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, due to the large volume and variety of data, you cannot tell which
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trustable
Manageable; tractable; hence, moderate; not violent
treatable
testable
, so,
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 Leads to people’s reliance on more authentic newspapers that have
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a countable
 background. But
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 variety can
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 lead to an advantage,
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a number
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 of choices.
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, you can read
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the comments
 of the USA’s president
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of
 social media and you no longer need to receive news from a
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.
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, it can decrease the chance of misinformation and misleading.
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, newspapers have been our main
source
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 of news throughout the history and have obtained experience and Prestige, so, they know that buy misinforming people they can damage their reputation or even worse harm the society.
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, their survival depends on complete, correct and neutral distribution of news. The fact that other media platforms or young and inexperienced,
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put
 them in
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 of news. In conclusion, in my opinion newspapers because of their more experience, reliability and stability throughout these years, that led to their survival until now makes them better sources to get our news.

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