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Sport Should Be Compulsory In School. To What Extent Do You Agree Or Disagree?

#sport #school
Sport
Suggestion
The sport
 is becoming more and more popular discussion topic among the public, which argues whether it is
important
Suggestion
an important lesson
lesson
 for young learners in school. So, should it be
obligotary
morally or legally constraining or binding
obligatory
 for pupils in the
curricullum or
Accept comma addition
curriculum, or
curriculum or
 should we remove the
lesson
 anytime soon? I completely agree that physical education lessons should be compulsory in schools, answering on
this
 question. As the habit of doing exercises from the early childhood and the importance of physical development
are
Suggestion
is
 essential for a healthy and happy life.
Firstly
, the healthy habit of doing sports from early ages helps to be fit naturally.
For instance
, scientific researches proof that the older a person becomes, the harder it is to develop a habit. If we have difficulties in cultivating
this
 useful action in adultery, it is better to encourage it among young people. So sports in schools will help to adopt effective behaviour in the easiest way.
Secondly
, the body development often is undervalued when compared with an
intelectual
of or associated with or requiring the use of the mind
intellectual
 one.
However
, discoveries in neurobiology and
neuropsychology
Suggestion
Neuropsychology
 convince that
exercises
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exercise
 help human beings to be more effective while studying and with handling stress. When sports
loses
Suggestion
lose
 its value and positive ramifications in public minds, it leads to unwanted exposure of less development in studies and emotional intelligence as well.
As a result
, a school should instil motivation for
sport
Suggestion
the sport
 to have a
harmonically
Suggestion
harmonious
harmonic
 organised life. In summary, I cannot agree more, that sport should exist as a
lesson
 in every grade. Exercises increase a quality of life
enourmously
extremely
enormously
, that can be seen
on
Suggestion
in
 the above examples. That's why I hope to see no restrictions on
this
lesson
 in
foreseeable future
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the foreseeable future
.

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