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Many people join distance-learning programmes (study material, post, TV, Internet) and study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the same benefit as attending colleges or universities does.

#people #programmes #study #post #tv #internet #home #benefit #colleges #universities
It is a good thing for people in senior management positions to get a higher salary than other workers in the same
company
. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Many Organizations pay higher compensation to Top Management employees rather than the juniors or
executives
Suggestion
executive
 employees. In my view, it is justified because the senior-level employees contribute to more responsibilities which helps in the
company
's growth. They are qualified with several degrees and more experienced. If Companies are paying higher salaries to their senior-level employees because these roles include a lot of organizations' key responsibilities
such
 as Strategy, Planning, Mapping, etc.
For Example
- A marketing Manager Plan and oversee programs to generate interest in the market. He identifies the
company
's product and develops marketing strategies to get maximum profit and customer satisfaction.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, his junior is responsible for the respective job. Customer care
expective
regard something as probable or likely
expecting
 is responsible for answering the queries of customers. He would not be responsible for any product or service failure in the market. The senior employees have leadership qualities.
indeed
Suggestion
Indeed
, They motivate their junior for their growth and
company
 expansion. An executive can not lead any teams or makes plans or strategies for
company
 growth. I would suggest that the top-level employees or CEO encourage their junior employees to work harder and promote and raise their remuneration which will help to increase the
company
 productivity.
on
Suggestion
On
 the other hand, if each employee receives the same
salary than
Accept comma addition
salary, then
salary then
 there will be no motivation to work harder and it will make a negative impact on the
company
's productivity. I Conclude, Salaries should be divided into the experience and the job role of an Employee. Since Senior-level managers are loaded with more responsibilities so it is imperative that they are paid more.
tudying
Suggestion
Studying
Tudying
 at a college or university.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • independence
  • communication
  • interaction
  • academic resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • hands-on experience
  • peer support
  • time management
  • procrastination
  • motivation
  • feedback
  • structured learning environment
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