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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, especially in
metros
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the metros
, regulations are finding
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 way
in
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into
 all streams of life. Many people believe that the layout of
constructed
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constructing
 buildings should be controlled by government.
On the other hand
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, builders, who invest money in the project have an opposite view.
This
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 essay will discuss both the views, and in my opinion, it is a business, who should have the right to control the layout, as
this
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 will help them to increase profitability and create uniqueness of a brand. To start with, financing the construction projects has
an
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a
 humongous cost associated. As
profitabilty
the quality of affording gain or benefit or profit
profitability
 is the major concern, designs and layouts of
newly constructed building
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newly constructed buildings
a newly constructed building
 should be controlled by them.
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, every builder will have
creativity
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creative
created
 and unique designs for their projects, which act as a trademark to home buyers in metro cities.
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, cities in California will have a unique
domb
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Domb
dome
thumb
 shaped row
houses
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house
, rather than high-rise
appartments
a suite of rooms usually on one floor of an apartment house
apartments
apartment
 in Mumbai.
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, governments, if given a chance to control the designs of new projects, they will have a standard layout across the country.
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, the skill set
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 required to create design in government organizations is missing in many countries.
In addition
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, there may be delays as
this
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 may involve a list of approvals. In conclusion, as stated above creativity and profitability of builders play an important role in the society. So, the designs should not be in the control of the authorities, as they can be boring and approvals for designs and can be time consuming.

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