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Today, food travels thousands of miles from the farm to the consumer. why is this? Is it positive or negative trend?

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In
last few decades
Suggestion
the last few decades
,
technology
 has
definately
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 shrunk the world. Owing to these, not only people, but
also
 food, tradition, innovations,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 are available ubiquitously as
similarly
 in
native land
Suggestion
the native land
native lands
.
Eating
Suggestion
Earthing
 materials,
also
 influenced by these advent. The reasons behind these universal availability of staples and the merits-demerits are discussed
further
. Availability of all cuisines
universally have
Suggestion
universally has
 many logics and the foremost one is packing industry development. Due to its
upgradation
, the packed food can stored as intact for one year or more than.
For example
, foods are packed in container by using nitrogen gas
technology
 can preserve food for a longer time as well as contamination free for a year.
Moreover
, using frozen
technology
, all raw materials and vegetables, fruits
etc
 are frozen by it and sent it to customers. To exemplify, frozen beans, tomatoes, and mangoes grow in India during limited period of season, which are frozen and exported to the USA, Canada and many other countries. Each coin has two sides
similarly
 packaging of edible items by using
technology
 has both. In case of benefits, people able taste their favourite cuisine in anywhere. To illustrate, Indian people can enjoy
indian
a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
 dishes in USA and
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
 dishes
also
 serve in India.
However
, the demerit is
original taste
Suggestion
the original taste
 hamper, because of
frozing
the withdrawal of heat to change something from a liquid to a solid
freezing
 and
nitrozen
a common nonmetallic element that is normally a colorless odorless tasteless inert diatomic gas; constitutes 78 percent of the atmosphere by volume; a constituent of all living tissues
nitrogen
 treatment. In
easy word
Suggestion
easy words
an easy word
, genetic alteration might be happened by applying chemicals on vegetables and its taste could be altered. All in all, packaging industries make eatable items more feasible and available to their lovers, but there are some merits and demerits
also
, which are not
eschewable
 for developers.
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