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SOME PEOPLE BELIEVE THAT READING STORIES FROM A BOOK IS BETTER THAN WATCHING TV OR PLAYING COMPUTER GAMES FOR CHILDREN. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE ?

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Nowadays, we all are highly influenced by technology. At that
time
, many laymen
have
Suggestion
had
 a notion that doing activities on TV and computer are good for children, while I and others believe that reading
book
 is wisdom. My inclinations are elucidated in upcoming text with appropriate examples. My
first
 and foremost reason to read paper
book
 is to accumulate knowledge. By reading, tender mind could learn, search, and gathers an enormous word bank, which will benefit in their future.
For example
, we can get outrageous benefit of dictionary reading right now. Involvement of mind while reading is active, is the
second
 reason. When we read any novels, articles or books, our brain and eye do work actively and simultaneously. And these will augment children’s mental abilities. To illustrate
,
Accept space
,
 whenever we read any
story
book
, our mind will imagine the characters of
story
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the story
a story
stories
 and their activities. Owing to
this
, cognitive areas of brain and eyes will act like a projector.
Thirdly
, after completion of any
story
book
, we can get some sort of wisdom, knowledge and morals, which will be beneficial during their difficult situation. Like The Ramayan and The Geeta, the epic books of the Hindu religion, by reading it, we can tackle all kinds of problems in our life.
However
, modern technology gave us all
this
 in an audio-visual manner, so we do not need to read
book
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the book
a book
, is the major counter thought. The
second
 argument is to read any
book
 is
time
 consuming while watch any
story
 or epic books videography will not only entertain us, but
also
 save our
time
 span. Totally, every coin has a two sides, technology serve us all stuff in little
time
 saving and entertaining manner, but influence of it on our body parts like the brain and eyes are not negligible anyhow.
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