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The planet population is reaching unsuitable levels. To what consequences may overpopulation lead? In your opinions, what measure can be taken to fight overpopulation?

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It is irrefutable to say that the global population has become a measurable concern for all of us. Clearly, it is rising drastically
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consequence
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 to increasing greenhouse gases and effect on the
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country's
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 problem. There are various consequences associated with overpopulation.
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 and foremost thing is that a significant increase in global temperature. Industrialization, over-farming, deforestation and desertification are the considerable contributor of greenhouse gas emission into the atmosphere, which can main cause of depletion of the earth ozone layer. T the planetary weather has become warmer and humid than ever before. Another point is linked to national economic outcomes. The overpopulation has a definite effect on a
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's economy.
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 can contribute to a low GDP per capita, in order to provide sufficient resources to all residents, the
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 will likely have to depend on foreigner debt. For an instant, India is the
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-largest populated
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, along with the GDP growth of a
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 has been gradually decreasing to 4.7% for the
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 few years.
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, to tackle unemployment, starving and other development, India has to rely on foreign investors.
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, I believe that
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 overpopulation is a global concern, it can be eliminated very extend at National level solutions. To avoid
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 kind of disasters and save mother earth, the national
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 should implement policies
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 as one-child policy in China. China is a
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 where a couple are allowed to give birth to an only single baby in order to avail
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 benefits.
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, China could control their population and save their resources for future generations.
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, abortion should be considered as a legal act, where it is looking like a crime.
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, the
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 should hold awareness campaigns to educate woman to empower at a town level. To sum up, I would say that the overcrowded planet may be a result of global warming and leading to a shortage of resources. It can be controlled by
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 support. I, personally, opinion that people should utilise natural resources very carefully, and obey the
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 institutions and to reduce
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 outcome.

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