Children are facing more pressures nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

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oday many
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Today, many
children get a lot of stress from academic, social and commercial effects. In our c
hallanging
requiring full use of your abilities or resources
challenging
world, many possible solutions must be evaluated. In
this
essay, I will explore some of the causes of these problems, as well as proffer reasonable resolutions f
or
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to
this
issue
. Regarding to the causes of
this
issue
, there are blatant and obvious causes. One p
otent
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potential
cause of academic pressure to the young people is the s
hortege
the property of being an amount by which something is less than expected or required
shortage
shorter
of the profession for the graduate students.
For instance
, there i
s
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are
no many jobs a
vailabe
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
for information technology graduate students in my country. Coming to the effect of social
issue
, many children within p
oor familiy
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the poor family
poor family
get a lot of p
sycological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
hurt from their neighbours. To i
llusterate,
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
I know one of my f
riend
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friends
who has a child, but he could not afford to get for him whatever he w
ant.
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wants
He said to me that his boy is e
xtreamly
to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect
extremely
hurt in p
sycological context.
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a psychological context
psychological context
sociological context
In addition
, many boys could not get high salary due to their ineffective marketing strategy.
As a result
, they might get fired from their work. Turning to the viable solutions to these
i
ssue,
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issues
there are many approached. For academic
i
ssue,
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issues
the most effective one is to get a high quality e
ducations
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education
from a h
igh
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highly
ranked university. T
he young
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Younger
The younger
children, who get his education from H
arverd
American philanthropist who left his library and half his estate to the Massachusetts college that now bears his name (1607-1638)
Harvard
university as an example will have a better job in his country or abroad. For the social
issue
, I think the most effective and approved resolution for the children is to get involved and communicate with their c
osins
the child of your aunt or uncle
cousins
and friends. To i
llusterate
clarify by giving an example of
illustrate
more, the boys who are s
ocial
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socially
a
vtive
tending to become more severe or wider in scope
active
will overcome the effect of social issues.
Lastly
about the solution of marketing or commercial i
sssue,
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the boys who have an excellent background in marketing will get promoted and will continue in his job, Take my friend Ahmed as an example. He is a manager of his company, but he had finished many courses for marketing before he got that position. In conclusion, I think that the issues that face the children these days are more d
engerous,
involving or causing danger or risk; liable to hurt or harm
dangerous
dangers
and we have many r
esbonsibilites
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
to h
ep
the activity of contributing to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
help
them go through them. In the near future, I hope the government as well as the parents will take many effective steps to h
andles
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handle
s
uch as these issues.
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issues such as these
such issues as these
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pressure
  • globalized world
  • competitive education system
  • social media influences
  • cyberbullying
  • commercial pressures
  • aggressive marketing
  • materialistic desires
  • peer pressure
  • high expectations
  • standardized testing
  • quantifiable performance
  • stress and anxiety
  • extracurricular achievements
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