IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Proportion of male and female arrests by offence type, 2008/0

#proportion #arrests #offence #type
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The information given in the graph makes comparisons in the rate of genders who arrested by eight different crime kinds in September in 2008. While the figure for offence type over the par chart show, there are three kinds of crime that have the percentage of women higher than that of men, whereas the remaining offender types vice versa. Looking at the detail, it is considerable that violence against the person made up the highest proportion in total both males and females, roughly 33% and 31% respectively.The ratio crime of theft and handling stolen goods were ranked
second
Linking Words
 with 32% women arrested, approximately
third
Linking Words
-
second
Linking Words
 compared to that of men arrested.Fraud and forgery had the proportion offence low, which had the percentage of women arrested were 3% slightly larger that of man.
On the contrary
Linking Words
, Bobbery was the lowest proportion people arrested as well as the least serious.With Burglary, the ratio of man arrested were twice as high as that of women, simultaneously, it
also
Linking Words
 as high as that of Drug offences, roundly 7%. Criminal damage had the rate of female offender that higher than male, with 10% and 7% respectively.
Finally
Linking Words
, other offences accounted for 15% female arrested higher than male.
Submitted by nguyenmaixk2 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: