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Government should reduce their investment in arts, music and painting. Agree or disagree?

#government #investment #arts #music
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This issue, which
 frequently
genertes
bring into existence
generates
generate
 a
grest
relatively large in size or number or extent; larger than others of its kind
great
 deal of heated debate is
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 should reduce their investment in arts, music and painting and the problem is certainly discussed in
contemporary world
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the contemporary world
. Many academics contend that music is a huge range of
entertantment
an activity that is diverting and that holds the attention
entertainment
 in public life.
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the statement (oral or written) of an exchange of promises
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 by proponents to assume that students who have hobby to paint and art so
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 should invest more money to create their talent.
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an important part
 in arts life. A classic example of
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come to pass
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worldwide
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prefers
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,
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It
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in absence of
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the nation
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having a bearing on or connection with the subject at issue
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to consider or examine in speech or writing
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 agree with
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 that invest more money.

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