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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets there is no need to go to the cinema. Others say that to be fully enjoyed, films need to be seen in a cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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With the recent dramatic development of technology,
movie
 lovers can enjoy watching films on their mobile devices
instead
 of going to the cinema whereas some people are against
this
 idea. Both sides have their merits and On the one hand, cell phones and other smart devices indeed provide people with a wealth of movies of options in their pockets anytime, while cinemas often only distribute a film in two weeks. As my example, I have been in Canada for two years. During the time, I have been missing dozens of movies which were exclusively shown
in
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on
 the Vietnamese market.
Nonetheless
, I can enjoy them on my
Ipad
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iPad
IPad
pad
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 when they are uploaded online. I can
also
 pause the progress and
then
 continue watching a
movie
 without missing any exciting parts. Another advantage of seeing films on mobile devices is that they cost equivalent a meal for a whole year. Family members can share one premium account on Netflix or Amazon and
then
 they can bring the whole cinema home.
On the other hand
, being one of the people to sit in the cinema room to enjoy a brand-new
movie
 is exciting, which gives consumers a sense of pride, especially if the
movie
 is on its premiere and tickets are all sold months prior.
Moreover
, it is undeniable that the quality of sound and images and the atmosphere produce a tremendous effect on all customers’ senses.
As a result
, they can have a sense of contentment by being at the scene.
Furthermore
, on the release days, customers can buy souvenirs
such
 as figures, stickers, or badges of the movies to their collections.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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