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The graph and table below the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data provide information on average monthly temperatures and annual hours of sunshine in London, New York and Sydney.
Although
 the
temperature
 pattern of London and New York is similar, New York has colder winter and warmer summer. The average
temperature
 in New York during the cold season is about 5 degrees while the
temperature
 in London is 5 degrees warmer. July remains the warmest month for both cities. The opposite dynamic is observed in Sydney. Winter is the warmest season with the average
temperature
 of 25 degrees while the
temperature
 in the summer remains below 20 degrees. As for sunshine hours New York has the highest number of 2535 hours out of three cities. Lack of sunny days is noticed in London with a total of 1180 hours of sunshine a year.
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