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Advertising has become important tool for business and society. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays business
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Nowadays, business
 developing significantly. One of the crucial factors is advertising.
On the other hand
, some people claim that it is important while others prevent
this
 view. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views
of
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on
about
 the topic.
Advertisement
 helps to know about primary events in the business and society.
For instance
, unemployment people can find a job easily and companies can announce vacancies. Unemployment people know about vacancies through social media, TV and from the newspaper. If the company
need
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needs
 employment they just give an
announcement
 about that in social media. Another advantage of the
advertisement
 is that new
product
 speared among society by the help of
advertisement
.
Also
, customs can compare products with other compatible
product
 available in the market. Individuals see announcements on the TV and by the help of social networks
such
 as Instagram, Facebook. One of the disadvantages of
advertisement
 is a fake
announcement
 or information about device and
service
.
For example
, customers see the
advertisement
 about
product
 and
service
 in social media and they believe the appearance of
product
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the product
products
a product
 or information about
service
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the service
services
 which was given by the company. But in real life customers do not satisfied with
product
 and
service
. Another drawback of the
announcement
 is that irritate the people. People face with an
announcement
 when they are watching the video on
youtube
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YouTube
 and they watch their favourite film or TV show. It makes people angry To conclude,
advertisement
 is a bridge between business and society and helps find a job or announce a new
product
.
However
, information about
product
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a product
the product
 or
service
 will be false and do not meet
customers
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customer's
customer
 expectation. The endorsement makes people angry and annoys them. From my point of view,
advertisement
 has more advantages than disadvantages.

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