Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

While many

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that a fixed retirement age for all workers, whatsoever job they have done, would be fair for everyone to have a

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chance and enjoy

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before they become very old, others disagree and debate that workers who had

unpleasent

disagreeable to the senses, to the mind, or feelings

unpleasant

and stressful

work

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worked

for long years have the right to retire before their counterparts. Needless to say, governments have to treat all countrymen equally; and yes,

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refers to the speaker or writer

I

do

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

that setting a fixed age for retirement is the only way out. To retire before others is a real blessing and some people need it to compensate the very hard days they lived supporting the community and or doing an odd jobs. One of these could be serving the army; It is

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a hard and risky responsibility; a person has to stand in

frontlines

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the front lines

front lines

to protect his country and in a way he is ready to sacrifice his

life

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for his love

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for

of

the country. Does he not deserve to retire before others? While the answer obviously seems to be

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yes, but

when the given a

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thought, and compared to some other stressful responsibility, things change dramatically. A person who collects the garbage works equally hard and

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risks his

life

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by being always prone to sicknesses. We all deserve the best, we have all worked hard and for the society, many of us have nonstop been under enormous work pressure and stress, and everyone wants to have a rest before it is too late. To sum up, maybe one has worked a bit harder or his job has been more

stressful but

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stressful, but

we all deserve to have our retirements. I strongly

beleive

accept as true; take to be true

believe

a fixed retirement age would be fair to everyone and remove the feeling of comparison and inequality. We all have the right to enjoy

life

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before we are too old to walk and there is no

equaly

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equal

equally

to it when it comes after so many years of

hardwork

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hard work

and dedication.