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Band 3.5

 You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter your friend. In your letter:  Say where you are going  Describe your house  Explain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house • You should write at least 150 words. • You do NOT need to write your own address.

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 period, the US, UK, and other European countries generally had
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 ‘’the rich get richer and poor get poorer’’. In
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 of a country. Nowadays, there
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 less work for unskilled
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 the minimum wage, expand the earned
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 level of each individual, build assets for working families who
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 systems, redistribute the welfare
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 who have lower
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. The government should aid private sector industries by providing benefits in their taxation to avoid relocating which in turn helps to employ unskilled
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. After discussing the pertinent problems associated with increasing disparity, I felt that the only way to solve them is through joint efforts from the government, individuals, and private companies.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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