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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science subject. What are the causes? And the effects on society?

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In recent decades, the
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 of students enrolling in
science
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-related subjects
is becoming
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are becoming
 inadequate in different parts of the world. Given that
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 trend leads to a whole host of issues to society, identifying the reasons is key to finding the solutions. There are a
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 of reasons why
science
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 subjects are no longer appealing to students in universities or colleges.
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, since those subjects are often demanding and difficult, which requires a lot of diligence as well as a great deal of patience and intelligence, students may find it discouraging to opt for
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 courses as their majors. In fact,
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 subjects seem to be less attractive to students compared to economics or business-related subjects partially due to a higher level of commitment and difficulty involved, especially for young people who prefer instant gratification rather than long-term benefits.
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, as employment opportunities available for graduates in the
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 field are limited and extremely competitive, students are prone to be reluctant to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
 in related majors.
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 means that
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 a huge amount of time and effort is spent
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in
 these majors, there is no guarantee or little chance for them to land a decent job after graduation. A shortage of
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 learners can result in some negative effects on society.
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, as the
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 of
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 students is insignificant, other majors
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 as business or economics become prevalent,
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 the imbalance in the future workforce. In fact, increased competitiveness due to abundant degree holders of the same expertise might push a
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 of non-
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 graduates to the verge of unemployment.
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, if
fewer
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few
 students decided to learn
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 majors, there would be a shortage of
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 professionals as qualified employees within a nation.
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 means that a nation, especially those in the developing-nation group, will resort to offshore outsourcing and
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 being heavily reliant to more developed nations, which will no doubt hurt the domestic economy in the long-term. In conclusion, the challenging nature of
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 subjects and limited job prospects are hindrances to students considering entering
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 field, and serious problems are arising from
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 situation.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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