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Many people think it is very important to protect the environment but they make no effort to do it themselves. Why do you think this is the case? What actions should individuals take to protect the environment?

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It is abundantly clear today that our
environment
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 is under threat. There are many who believe in the importance of looking after it, but take no
action
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 themselves to do
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. In
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 is happening and propose ways in which anyone can give our
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 some of the protection it needs. The main reason why people take no
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 to take care of their
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 is because they are largely cut off from it. Let us take the example of half of our world’s population who are now living in urban areas. They often reside in high rise air-conditioned apartments, travel to work on trains and buses and rarely leave the city. Their offices are cool too, so, being mostly unaffected by pollution, global heating and other symptoms of our disregard for our
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, they have few daily reminders of the need to do anything to protect it.
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 they recognise that their world needs their help, they are not sufficiently affected or inconvenienced by decades of failure to care for it. There are so many ways in which people could act in support of their
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. The two I would propose taking a lead from the saying, ‘Think globally, act locally’. Because it is usually overwhelming for an individual when she thinks about how to protect the planet, the first
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 to take is to lobby elected officials
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 as members of parliament and local councillors to share her concerns, ask what environmental policies are in place and find out what her state and country representatives are doing to protect the
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. On a local level, in every city around the world there are groups actively engaged in caring for and improving their neighbourhood which anyone can join. From street gardens which supply free produce to citizens to groups campaigning for greener transport options, from food cooperatives, which grow food on rooftops and in underground car parks to those working to better recycle plastic waste, there are numerous ways the individual can take
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 to look after the local
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. Given the pressures of life, it is not surprising that people fail to act on their belief that it is important to protect the
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. Holding those we elect to account to take
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 and joining local initiatives to enhance the area we live in are two ways people can respond to their understanding of how important it is to look after the world we live in.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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