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Many people say that globalisation and the growing number of multinational companies have a negative effect on the environment. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that globalisation and grow of the number multinational corporations cause acute impact on the surroundings. It seems to me that
this
 trend has a contradictory influence on the
environment
, and I will explain why in
this
 essay.
To begin
 with, those who tend to support the idea of company's globalisation cite on different disadvantages which
this
 trend might bring.
Firstly
, manufactures and stations built by big corporations might not only emit a huge volume of green gasses into the air but
also
 pollute oceans, rivers and lakes. Examples, which occurred decades ago, can be seen in the case of the oil company BP, when due to spill of oil the Gulf of Mexico was contaminated.
Hence
,
this
 incident has a gloomy effect gulf and many species living in there, which is not even solved by our days.
Furthermore
, companies which specialize on vehicle manufactory,
such
 as the Range Rover or Minin have factories in India and
also
 pollute the
environment
 by emitting gasses.
Therefore looking
Accept comma addition
Therefore, looking
 at
this
plural of "this"
these
 two specific cases there are no doubts that globalization might have a negative influence on our world. Admittedly, opponents of
this
 point of view object and claim that building big companies around the world might be positive for
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. They declare that corporations provide financial support for different environmentalist organizations
such
 as the WWF or Save the Planet and
this
 might be considered as beneficial impact. Overall, despite the minor support for environmentalist organizations globalisation and increasing the number of multinational companies appear to bring many drawbacks for
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.

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