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Causes of worldwide land degradation and causes of land degredation by region

#land #degradation #degredation #region
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The pie chart shows us the
three
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 main causes of worldwide
land
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degradation
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.And the table shows us the proportion of
three
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 reasons of
land
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degredation
changing to a lower state (a less respected state)
degradation
 by
three
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rigion
the extended spatial location of something
regions
region
 in the 1990s. From the chart, we could clearly draw a conclusion that there were
three
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 root causes resulting
land
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degradation
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throughtout
all the way through
throughout
 the globe
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over-grazing
,
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deforestation and over-cultivation.
Over-grazing
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Overgrazing
 take up the biggest proportion
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reaching 35%
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followed by deforestation and over-cultivation
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which are 30% and 28% respectively.
other
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Other
 reasons only occupied 7%. From the figures it was shown in the table
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Europe was facing the most severe
degradation
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 among the
three
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 regions in
total of
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total, of
 23
% while
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%, while
 only 5% of total
land
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degradation
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 happened in North America.
it
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It
 was clear to explain why the Europe was confronted
wiht
expresses the means used
with
 most severe
degradation
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 among the
three
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 regions that the percentage of two main reason
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,
deforestaion
the state of being clear of trees
deforestation
 9.8% and over-
cultication
socialization through training and education to develop one's mind or manners
cultivation
 7.7% were
significally
with respect to science; in a scientific way
scientifically
 higher than that two proportion of North America and Oceania which were respectively 0.2% and 3.3% in North America and 1.7% and
nill
the world's longest river (4150 miles); flows northward through eastern Africa into the Mediterranean; the Nile River valley in Egypt was the site of the world's first great civilization
Nile
 in
Ocenia
a large group of islands in the south Pacific including Melanesia and Micronesia and Polynesia (and sometimes Australasia and the Malay Archipelago)
Oceania
.Oceania's total
proprotion
the quotient obtained when the magnitude of a part is divided by the magnitude of the whole
proportion
appropriation
preparation
 of
degratation
changing to a lower state (a less respected state)
degradation
 was
next
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 to the Europe's
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Whereas over-grazing was the root cause of national
degradation
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taking up 11.3%.
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