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Many people get little or no exercise during the working day or in their free time, and develop health problems as a result. Why do many people do not get enough time to exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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In recent modern age, many people suffer from little or no exercise.
This
 essay will examine the reasons why people do not get enough time to exercise and suggest solutions to the problem. There are several reasons lead people lose their movement and
consequently
 their health in their life.
Firstly
, by developing the technology, machines work
instead
 of people, which is lead to inactivity.
For example
, in the past, individuals lift heavy objects by themselves, but after the innovation of the crane, no one needs to lift the heavy object by themselves.
Secondly
, many people do the office work which only needs to sit at the desk and work with the computer and so on do their jobs.
Finally
, the majority of people use their own private transportation and not even walk to reach to the public transportation stations. Several steps can be taken to tackle the issue.
Although
 the machinery makes the job easier for the workers, they have to do part of the job by themselves to make their body move.
However
, they should take care of hazardous job which should be done by machines only.
Moreover
, office workers should take some walking steps everyone over.
For instance
, they can go to the pantry for coffee and tea and do not ask office made to bring them.
Besides
, expanded and convenience public transportation can encourage people to use them
instead
 of using private cars. In conclusion, while lack of physical activity during the working hours and free time lead to health problems for every member of society, steps can be taken to tackle the issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Time constraints
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Passive leisure activities
  • Workplace wellness programs
  • Active commuting
  • Subsidized
  • Public awareness
  • Health benefits
  • Incentivizing
  • Accessible public spaces
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