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Fewer and fewer young people are choosing to become teachers.Why do young people not want to become teachers?How this could be changed?

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Teachers
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 are considered as an integral and one of the most important professions from the ancient times.But, lately the number of young people taking teaching as their professional career has plunged.There are a number of reasons that have contributed to
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 decline in
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interest
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 lifestyle to name some. Apparently, every individual wants a job that can not only fulfil rudimentary needs
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 but
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 enhance their lifestyles.Contrastingly, teaching as a profession is not able to meet the expectations of
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youngsters, leading to the paucity of
teachers
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 in the present era.
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, the salary of
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 is scant, which results younger generation
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 the profession.
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, the initial wage of
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 in India is around 20 thousand, which is half as compared to
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 of doctors and IT professionals. Aggravating the hardships,
teachers
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 have to undergo
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extra pressure and sacrifice their personal time at home to make exam question papers,
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 exam copies.
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, the teacher has an additional responsibility of handling small children and teenagers, which adds up to the effort by manifold required to train them in respective topics.
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 should have
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 commensurate with other professions which would foster youths and entice them to take up teaching as a career.
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, the burden on the
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 should be adequately monitored and should be decreased if
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 hampering the personal life of the teacher. In
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 nutshell,
teachers
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 have a huge responsibility
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up
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the
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future generations.
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, scarcity of good
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 can prodigiously affect
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 of young minds.So, the current trend can be altered by giving appropriate recognition and in proportion
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 with the other professions.
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