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Some people feel that entertainers ( e.g. film starts, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which type of other job should be highly paid?

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To begin
 with, here according to the some individuals the famous people who are on TV like movie actors and game personalities or singers are getting more pay than they should get.
In addition
, I will be explaining that whether I support
this
 thinking or not, and
in addition
 to I will discuss which other professions deserves the high amount of pay.
Firstly I
Accept comma addition
Firstly, I
 would state that I assent to the above statement that they earn more than they should, while there is no denying the fact that they work hard. These people featured on the TV too much,
hence
 they are widely recognized by everyone.
On the contrary
, I believe there are other fields as well who works as hard as these people but still they are not able to earn that much.
For example
 a movie actor earns in Crores for acting in a single movie while other professions like their support staff. Moving on, I believe the Army, Doctors and Police are thankless jobs and they definitely deserves to pay much more than they are getting, because there are some of the very important areas of our society.
For instance
, they always have to do their job irrespective of the situation they are in, even more when there are some problems going on
moreover
 their effort actually increases while others can afford to rest. They provide us the safety,
consequently
 which ensures our freedom.
Finally
, I would like to conclude by restating that these fields earn more salary than they should and Doctors, Army and Police
also
 deserves the hike in the money that they are getting undoubtedly their task is extremely important and hard and in a sense they are the true role models and heroes of our society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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