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Some people are afraid to go out for fear of being robbed on the streets. Still, there are robberies that happen inside houses. What do you think is the best thing a person can do to ensure his/her own security? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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While it is quite risky sometimes to get robbed on the streets, we should not neglect the fact that houses aren’t an exception to
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. One of the most important steps to ensure one’s own security on the streets is to avoid dark, narrow and less frequented walkways. As for homes, the best safety measure is to lock all doors, days and nights.
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, we will discuss the safety on the streets and how to avoid being robbed. The risk of robbery is higher for walkers. The latter can be targeted during night time, making it easier to act without being noticed. Same applies for people while driving, but with a lesser magnitude. In
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 instance, robbery may happen while waiting
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. The best prevention is to lock down the car from the inside, so as to stop any attempt of opening the car doors, by force.
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, staying at home cannot prevent from robberies, unless precautions are taken to ensure full safety. It is crucial to install proper locks on doors and windows, as well as any opening that attract thieves, disregarding which time of the day it is. Robbery can happen at any moment.
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, keeping some rooms lit may keep the bad people away, especially when nobody is home. Music may be an option as well, it sends a sign that there is someone home. In conclusion, there are many steps to be taken to ensure one’s own security is preserved.
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 it on the streets or inside houses, one should be vigilant and careful to avoid unpleasant situations
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 as robbery. The best way is to always choose the more frequented streets, lock the car’s doors, and make sure the house is safely closed.

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