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Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

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Rich people earn more than enough to lead a comfortable life so that they can spend their disposable income on anything they like.
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, they can use their excess wealth for the well-being of other people. Take a look around and you will see that the biggest philanthropists are all rich people. Today multi-billionaires in the US and other countries do
more philanthropy
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more philanthropic
 than the governments of the world.
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, being rich helps in helping others.
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, I agree with the given argument to a certain extent. Poor people,
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, have to struggle hard to meet their own needs. When they don’t have enough
money
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 to meet their own
needs they cannot
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needs, they cannot
 donate
money
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 to help others. On the flip side, charity or philanthropy isn’t all about donating
money
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. It
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 involves donating time and effort. Both rich and poor people can make a difference to the society. You don’t necessarily have to donate
money
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 to help people. If you can spare at least an hour a day you can help people in very many ways. If you are educated and have a few hours to spare a week, you can spend that time in teaching underprivileged kids. Those few hours will make a huge difference to their lives. And for doing that all that you need is a strong desire to help other people. What
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 means is that
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money
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 plays a significant role in helping people it is not the only thing that matters. Charitable institutions
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 require people who can donate their time and goodwill.
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, not being rich is no reason to stay out of philanthropy. Looking at both sides of the argument, it doesn’t take a lot of effort to see that richness is not the only factor that determines a person’s ability to help others. It is important, but even if you are not rich you can help people in several other ways.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wealthy
  • financial resources
  • philanthropy
  • charitable organizations
  • donations
  • fundraising
  • support
  • initiatives
  • contribute
  • fulfillment
  • purpose
  • selfless
  • altruistic
  • prioritize
  • personal gain
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