some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extend do you agree with the view?

A category of
people
's
view point
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viewpoint
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about
government's
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the government's
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budget for
art
is not helpful for the
people
however
it could be spent for crucial
projects
for the
people
. Considering the importance of
projects
like water distribution, virus dis-infection and more, it would be supportive for the
people
if the
government
allocate
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funds
to
the
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apply
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critical
project
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projects
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than
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arts
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the arts
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. Arts in our
meuseum
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museum
museums
, other sculptures, paintings, statues,
old
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and old
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books
has
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be to maintained and preserved. Other cultural and
art
galleries are already drawing more income through visitor's fee
that is
suffiecient
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sufficient
enough to fund employing
people
, purchasing instruments and maintaining facilities
. .
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.
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Meuseum and other
art
galleries
is
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already sell some of the items allowed to sell for visitors
also
through
auction
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,
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when
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a surpless
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surpless
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surplus
amount of money is in credit
for
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to
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the
art
associations and
meuseums
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museums
;
government
spending
for
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on
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arts is a total waste of resources. Considering
lack
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the lack
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of
funds
to execute crucial
projects
like water distribution, primary education,
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and
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electricity infrastructure maintenance; one
government
must observe critical
people
projects
as
priority
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as well
allocating
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funds
for the
projects
that could solve
people
's
day to day
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life issues. Spending on a revenue
genarating
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generating
entity is of no better usage of
funds
, rather utilizing the budget for
primary
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a primary
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education project that supports future generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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