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Many foods are shipped from far away. Some people think that eating local food is more environmentally and economically. Do you think the advantages outweigh its disadvantages?

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In the era of globalization, it is easy nowadays to import and export the goods from different countries, same applies to the foods and products shipped across the world to satisfy the demand and supply of other nations.
it
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It
 has both advantages and disadvantages associated with
this
.
To begin
 with, the local grown
food
 is beneficial for both people and the economy of that nation. If people start eating their native grown
food
, it will help the local farmers with the money and encourage them to grow more
food
 in their lands.
Moreover
, the impact, shipping of
foods
benefit
goods
 across
country
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the country
 creates, will be low.
The low
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Lower
 carbon emissions will help
reducing
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reduce
green house effect
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the greenhouse effect
greenhouse effect
 as the
food
 travel through the planes or ships and it
emit
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emits
 the pollutants that are harmful for
ozone layer
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the ozone layer
. By using local
food
, we can reduce the footprint and have
more healthy environment
Suggestion
a more healthy environment
. On the other side, by importing and exporting the
foods
benefit
goods
 from other places, one can enjoy and taste their loved
food
 any time
,
Accept space
,
any season of the year and can
also
 explore new foods that are not available in their local shops. It
also create
Suggestion
also creates
has also created
 opportunities for jobs for people as there will be so many people involved
ion
a unit of length equal to one twelfth of a foot
in
 the process of the shipping and receiving.
This
 could be disadvantage of
this
 system that it may
low
Suggestion
lower
 the morale of the local suppliers and they may stop working as they
can not
can not
cannot
 handle the pressure of the demand and
can not
can not
cannot
 keep up their prices with the global rates In my opinion, both facts
has
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have
 their own benefits and
limitations but
Accept comma addition
limitations, but
 the benefits are way more ahead than of the limitations.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • carbon emissions
  • transportation
  • environmentally friendly
  • economically beneficial
  • local farmers
  • local economy
  • fresher
  • nutritious
  • food security
  • imports
  • preserving
  • traditional farming practices
  • biodiversity
  • limited variety
  • availability
  • cost
  • contributor
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