Nowadays online shopping is extremely popular. Discuss the impact of it on the environment and on people, who lost their jobs because of it.

In the modern world, the technology is
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upgraded
and these days we have different
markets which
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markets, which
is very famous, because they offer a
lots
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lot
of products which sometime not available in local stores.
This
development
have
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has
has had
some positive and negative effect on our society. In
this
essay I will describe both views,
then
I will reach on my opinion
Firstly
, the online shopping
have been
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has been
all lot benefit
for
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of
their customers. Because they offer an opportunity to stay at home and get different things through online invest mains online store.
In addition
, we have different side to choose
for
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from
what we want and we know all ingredients which they used to make
this items
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this item
these items
.
For example
, the Amazon is a world best online shopping site and I
this
website we have all products like beauty, gym, clothes and other more.
Moreover we
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Moreover, we
purchase anything anywhere from own nation or outside.
Hence
.
As a result
, it is more beneficial for individuals who do not have to go for shopping or they don't have time.
However
, these
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upgrades
have a lot bad effect on our environment. Because it
decrease
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decreases
the employment proportion and less
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customers
to the hookers.
Furthermore
, these
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effects
was
happened
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happening
to unemployment as well as if they
have more sell
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have more to sell
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
they want more customers
otherwise
they only just pay their salary that’s mean they do not get any benefits than the unemployment was
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happening
.
In contrast
, these developments
also
have more jobs different field
.
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For instance
, if anyone was purchased anything through
online
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online, then
then
this
item go
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with
the shipment and
then
the cargo company will want more employment because we have a different sites to purchase and the like to
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shop
because it’s
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trendy
nowadays. In Conclusion, I totally believe
this
upgrades
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has
more benefits compared with implements I think
this
upgrade was create more jobs in different fields.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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