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Argument show that it is better to own your business than to work for someone else

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Introduction
Usually, people prefer to keep working for
someone
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 else
instead
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 of taking a step and starting their own businesses. I strongly believe that it is better to own your
business
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 than to work for
someone
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 else.
Body paragraph 1
Opponents of
this
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 position have two basic objections, primarily that starting a
business
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 is t
oo
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are
 risky and,
secondly
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, that working for
someone
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 else provides you a stable
income
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. As for risk, owning your
business
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 won’t be too risky if you planned it properly and studied it closely. As for
income
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, as a
business
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 owner, you will have a higher
income
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 than a fixed monthly sala
ry which
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salary, which
also
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 can secure your financial future, not to mention the fact that you may bring millions to your employer and still get the same salary.
Body paragraph 2
Owning a
business
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 has more
job
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 safety. Since you are your own boss, you can’t get fired. According to research from Willis Towers Watson, more than 25% of employees are in high- retention-risk which means that there is a big possibility for them to lose their jobs so owning your
business
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 will be safer.
Body paragraph 3
Being self-employed increases your productivity
as a result
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 of having a passion for your
job
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. The story behind establishing most successful businesses emphasizes
this
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 idea.
For instance
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, Anita Riddock, who was one of the most successful businesswomen, was the founder of The Body Shop. She grew up in difficult financial situations and worked as a newspaper seller and as a teacher until she noticed her passion for natural skin
care and
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skin care
 decided to start her own
business
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.
Subsequently
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, she started making her own natural skin
care pro
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skin care
ducts and selling them in her small shop. Her small
business
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 kept growing more and more and now The Body Shop branches are all over the world.
Conclusion
To conclude, it is clear that owning your
business
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 has more benefits than working for
someone
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 else. Carefully studied
business
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 is not too risky and it can provide you a higher
income
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.
Furthermore
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, as a
business
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 owner, you have more
job
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 safety since you are your own boss and more productivity since you are passionate about your
job
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. For these reasons, I strongly believe that you must take a step forward and start your own
business
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.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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